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The pie chart below gives information on how people use four types of transport and the table provides of five reasons data of using a car in Edmonton.

The pie chart below gives information on how people use four types of transport and the table provides of five reasons data of using a car in Edmonton.
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This
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 pie chart illustrates the data on
edmonton
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Edmonton
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 on the
people
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 use four different modes of transport and
also
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 the five
motive
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motives
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 on which
this
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 data was generated.
Cars
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 are the most used form of transport the
people
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used
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use
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.
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 with, it is very clear that the percentage of
cars
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 that the
people
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 of
edmonton
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Edmonton
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used
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use
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 is the highest
with
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at
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 45%.
Following
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this
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 closely is light rail transit with 35% that entails the population of persons using it was the second largest. Meanwhile,
bus
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buses
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 and
taxi
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taxis
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was
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were
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 on the same frequency with a total of 20% for both respectively. The table shows the conditions of car usage in the city, most individuals used
cars
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 to transit over to work as
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 is the faster route to work with 55%. 45% of business owners oblique to
cars
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 as transport mode making them second highest. Parents used
cars
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aswell
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as well
 to take their children to school with 40%. Leisure activities and shopping are the least reasons the
people
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 gave for commuting
with
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by
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Use synonyms
cars
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car
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 with 10% each.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, cars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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