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The provided table gives information about the number of fast food consumed in Melbourne over a
twenty –
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twenty–year
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year
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 period between 2005 and 2025.
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, it is obviously seen that
the
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in the
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 analyzed period, hamburger was the highest
of
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fast food,
where
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which where
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 majority of people from Melbourne utilized,
whereas
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 the lowest
types
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type
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 of food was noodles. Getting back to the details
that
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at the beginning of the
year
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 human beings who consumed
hamburger
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hamburgers
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 was 40,
then
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 in the middle of the
year
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 the indicator decreased slightly, by 2025 had grown up and reached
at
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51,
by
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contrast
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 fried rice and noodles were the lowest
indicators
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 in the analyzed period. The
indicators
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 fried rice and noodles were the same at the beginning of the
year
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 and made up
at
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6,
then
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 both of the
indicators
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 increased a bit,
by
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and by
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 2025 had peaked at 9. The
indicators
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of
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for
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 fried chicken and salads were at 40 collectively,
then
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 fried chicken was a remarkable increase ,
whereas
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 the indicator
of
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for
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 salads grew
up
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rapidly, end the of
year
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 the
indicators
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 were the approximately same 45 and 41 respectively.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year, indicators with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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