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The table below shows the numbers of people in each age group working in certain sectors in the UK in 1998 and 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the numbers of people in each age group working in certain sectors in the UK in 1998 and 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates how many people in each group
work
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 in certain sectors in the UK between 1998 and 2006.
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, big differences were observed in the technology field. The number of workers from
middle
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middle-aged
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age
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 groups increased in
hotel
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and
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catering and
education
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,
while
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this
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 indicator decreased in the building
sector
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. Moving to a more detailed analysis,
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 the number of people in
technology
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the technology
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 field was the lowest at the beginning of the period, it increased dramatically in all
age
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 groups, and the biggest change was in 26-35
aged
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people from 63,889 to 454,375. The opposite was true for building. The figure in
this
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sector
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 ranged between 5,400 and 112,565 before declining to 3,287 and 86,430. With regard to the
hotel
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 and catering
sector
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 and
education
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sector
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, the number of employees in the youngest
age
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 group decreased in both sectors to 18,998 and 4,987, respectively. The middle
age
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 groups saw a considerable rise in both
hotel
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 and catering (under 25,000) and
education
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 (over 112,000). The figure for 56-65 aged employees declined approximately two times in
education
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, which accounted for 43,647 in 1998. That indicator in
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hotel
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the hotel
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 and catering
sector
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 rose from 4,300 to 7,544.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, hotel, education, sector with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • workforce distribution
  • significant
  • sector
  • trend
  • increase/decrease
  • composition
  • employment patterns
  • shift
  • notable
  • preference
  • age group
  • contrast
  • analyze
  • composition
  • reaffirm
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