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\The chart below how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. Summarise the informationby selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

\The chart below how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. Summarise the informationby selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart
illustration
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illustrates
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 to
frequently
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frequency
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 of eating at
junkfood
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junk food
restaurant
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restaurants
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 among
people
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 in the USA from 2003 to 2013.
Overall
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, the trend starts with the highest
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people
Correct quantifier usage
number of people
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in
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at
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 30%, with
a
Correct article usage
apply
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once a
week
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 and once or twice a month,
while
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 the lowest percentage of
people
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in
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is
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 3% for
everyday
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every day
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.
Whereas
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,
on
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in
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 2003 was much higher than 2013 in once a
week
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. The begins with, in 2003 had highest fast food restaurants 33% of
people
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 in once a
week
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. The 2013 had the lowest in 25% of
people
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in
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apply
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once a
week
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. Several times a
week
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, week with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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