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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features，and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features，and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph demonstrates the consumer's purchase and drinking habits of
coffee
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 and tea in five
Austrailian
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Australian
 cities from the result of a questionnaire, which surveyed
subject's
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the subject's
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 buying experience in
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last
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the last
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 4 weeks.
Overall
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, most individuals go to a cafe for the beverage in Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, and Hobart.
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, the ranking in
oder
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order
 of its percentage in these
cites
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cities
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 follows by buying instant
coffee
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,
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apply
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 and buying fresh
coffee
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.
To begin
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 with, people who had gone to
cafe
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cafes
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takes
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 up nearly 65% in Melbourne, the highest rate among the cities,
while
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 Adelaide has the least
percetage
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percentage
 of
citizen
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citizens
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, which stands well below 50%. In terms of people who purchased instant
coffee
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 consists of its highest rate of around 55% in Hobart
,
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 and the smallest proportion of 45% or so in
Sydeny
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Sydney
.
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, Brisbane has the least individuals drank fresh
coffee
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, which is under 35%.
Sydeny
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Sydney
,
in contrast
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, has the most consumers who had fresh
coffee
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 with well below 45%. The notable difference is that the rate of buying instant
coffee
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 is higher than that of buying fresh
coffee
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 in Adelaide, which is the only city
has
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that has
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different
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a different
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 trend compared to the others.

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