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The chart shows the unemployment situation in Australia in the year 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the unemployment situation in Australia in the year 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart describes the unemployment situation in Australia during 2012, where the year is
diveded
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divided
on
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into
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 quarters. The person taken into consideration comes from two different areas: one is the urban
area
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, and the other is the rural
area
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. The data
of
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for
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 the cities
area
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 illustrates that it started the year with
the
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apply
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2 per
cent
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 of unemployees,
then
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 increased
steadly
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steadily
 in the second quarter, to had a dip in the third quarter (2 per
cent
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). The
last
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 quarter rose gradually
nearly
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by nearly
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the
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apply
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5 per
cent
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.
On the other hand
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, the
bucolican
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bucolic
area
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 started with more the 6 per
cent
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 of people without work, to have a steady downward trend in the second period.
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, in the
last
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semester
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semester,
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 the rate fluctuated between 5,5 per
cent
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 to 5 per
cent
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.
To sum up
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, the percentage of unemployed in Australia in 2012 had a dramatic increase in the urban
area
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 and the
bucolican
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bucolic
area
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reimaned
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remained
 stable.
This
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 means that during 2012, Australia had a rise of people who don't work.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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