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The plans below show a Harbour in 2000 and how it looks today.

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The two plans illustrated below show the Porth Harbour in the year 2000 and today.
Although
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 some structures remained unchanged throughout the years others faced some alterations.
Overall
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, the noticeable increase in the number of docks allowed a smoother flow for the Passenger ferries today as compared to the year 2000.
In addition
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 to that, the showers and toilets have doubled in number between the two plans.
In contrast
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, the Car park remained unchanged in number and size but a slight change was made where the connecting
road
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 between it and the Main
road
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 is now West
instead
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if
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of
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 South.
In
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On
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 the map, the Marina and the Fishing boats have switched positions
between
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over
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 the years and newly constructed Cafes and Shops are now seen right next to the Marina. A drastic change was the unused Castle which is now a Hotel with a neighboring pool. There is
also
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 a branch
road
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the
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that
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 connects the Hotel to the
Road
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 , which was not once there. In terms of The Lifeboat and the Private
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Beach
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beach
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beach,
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 they remained unchanged. At the
north
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north,
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 we can still find the Public beach still in place.

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coherence and cohesion
Try to enhance the logical flow by using more varied linking words and phrases to connect ideas, especially between different paragraphs.
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Consider providing a clearer conclusion that reinforces your main points or summarizes the overall changes, even briefly at the end.
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Your introduction provides a clear overview of what the plans depict, setting a good context for the essay.
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You've included specific details about the changes in the harbour, demonstrating a good understanding of the differences between the two plans.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • multi-purpose building
  • recreational facilities
  • maritime safety
  • leisure destination
  • tourism-focused
  • infrastructure improvements
  • pedestrian promenade
  • landmark
  • expanded roads
  • transport infrastructure
  • industrial use
  • cruise ship terminal
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