The picture below shows the plan of a museum in 1998 and after some changes were made in it in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
In 1998, a
garden
was located in the middle of the Use synonyms
museum
, with a cafe behind it and a ticket entrance in front of it. There was a temporary exhibition room at the bottom left corner and Use synonyms
also
both restroom and bags were placed at the bottom right. Linking Words
Moreover
, the Linking Words
museum
's shop was on the left side next to the WC and bags and coats. Use synonyms
Lastly
, the permanent exhibition rooms were separated into two sides of the Linking Words
museum
. Use synonyms
However
, there were a lot of changes in 2008, starting with the Linking Words
garden
. The fountains were added to the Use synonyms
garden
and a cafe was extended to have a sitting area inside it at the same time. The store and bags area were moved to the bottom left. Use synonyms
Furthermore
, the temporary showroom was expanded and put on the left side of the Linking Words
garden
and the Use synonyms
museum
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finally
had the restaurant, which was located on the top left of the map. Linking Words
Finally
, all areas of the permanent exhibition were shifted to the right-hand side of the Linking Words
museum
.Use synonyms
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task achievement
Consider providing a brief introduction that outlines the purpose of the report and gives a general overview of the changes made to the museum between 1998 and 2008.
coherence and cohesion
Try to improve the logical flow of information by using cohesive devices such as 'Firstly', 'Secondly', and 'Finally' when presenting changes to the museum. This will help the reader follow your report more easily.
task achievement
Include more specific and detailed comparisons between the areas in the museum before and after the changes, indicating how the layout has improved or altered in terms of visitor experience.
content
You have provided a good description of the primary changes made to the museum layout, showing clear observations between the two time periods.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite