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Band 2.5

More students from developing countries are moving to developed countries. Are rich countries stealing talented people from poorer countries? How can people be attracted to stay in their home country?

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 other’s countries.
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 essay will first suggest that many nations which just developing ,losing
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talents
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 in studies and university.Can be the most viable
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 economy. To commence with ,decision
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 many capital investment. Abroad have large
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 have in developing nations.In advancing
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 if we are to raise the standard ,open up new opportunities in all countries with our training ,
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 to select teachers from all over the world with experience,can reach a level that would students
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 which just developing ,must appreciate great talents and open
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 eyes. Offer big projects or help in
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 growth.To give magnificent education .Apply for a job and don’t refuse in plant starting .
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country
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 is equal to the growth of oneself and the future
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 the young. In conclusion, to prevent the loss of young talents, we need big attachments.
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 students in developing countries
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plays a big role in the future.

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coherence and cohesion
The introduction is somewhat unclear and could be more effectively structured to present your main argument. Consider rewriting it to clearly state your position on whether rich countries are 'stealing' talent and how to retain talent in developing countries.
task achievement
Each paragraph should have a clear main idea that is supported by relevant examples and explanations. Ensure that you stay focused on the points you want to make and elaborate on them more thoroughly.
coherence and cohesion
Use more varied and complex sentences. Some sentences are quite fragmented and lack proper punctuation. This affects the overall readability of your essay. For example, revise sentences like 'this essay will first suggest that many nations which just developing...' to improve structure and clarity.
task achievement
Try to provide specific examples or data to support your main points. For instance, when discussing education systems or economic investments, referencing specific countries or studies can help make your argument more convincing.
task achievement
You show an understanding of the issues surrounding talent migration and developmental investment, which is an important aspect of the topic.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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