The table below shows the percentage use of four different fuel types to generate electricity in five Asian countries in 2005.

The table below shows the percentage use of four different fuel types to generate electricity in five Asian countries in 2005.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The table below shows the percentage use of four different fuel types to generate electricity in five Asian countries in 2005.
The table given illustrates the comparison of electricity generation using four distinctive types of fuel in five Asian nations in 2005. Looking from an
overall
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perspective, it is evident that the proportion of CAL accounted for the highest value in Malaysia and Singapore.
However
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, nuclear power was most used in
Japan
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. All figures were given in
percentage
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. In terms of CAL, the figure for
this
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section in 2 nations, which are Malaysia and Singapore were both recorded at 61 and 42, respectively,
whereas
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in comparison, the proportion in the remaining categories
were
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significantly lower, at 3,5 and 6.
Additionally
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, the data on nuclear in
Japan
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was the highest, at 49,
while
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there was no sign of electricity
generator
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generators
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used nuclear in
Thailand
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.
Nevertheless
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, South Korea was slightly lower than
Japan
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, at 33 and the figures
on
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2 other countries took 19 and 13. Regarding PP,
this
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type of fuel
mainly
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utilized in
Thailand
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, at 36,
while
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the figure for other nations only ranged from 2-3.
Moreover
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, South Korea went the major part for HAW, at 48. Meanwhile, the data on
Thailand
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was marginally lower, at 19. The percentage of other fuels used in
Thailand
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was the biggest, at 42, compared to 39 both in Singapore and
Japan
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,
along with
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13 and 11 in Malaysia and South Korea, in the given order.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words japan, thailand with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "comparison" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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