this diagram shows the brick manufactureing process

this diagram shows the brick manufactureing process
IELTS Writing Task Chart for this diagram shows the brick manufactureing process
The process illustrates the stages of brick production. The process includes three main stages, beginning with the extraction of clay and ending with delivery.
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with, the original clay is extracted by a digger.
Following
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this
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step, the rock is sifted through the metal grid on a moving roller at the same time as the sand and water are added.
After
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this
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stage is complete, the mix is produced the bricks by cutting methods using a wire cutter or being poured
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a mould. Once the blocks have been formed, they are
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brought to the drying oven for 24-48 hours to remove excess moisture. After, the dried bricks are heated at a moderate temperature of between 200 and 980 degrees before turning on the temperature to almost 1300 degrees.
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the heated bricks are cooled in a chamber.
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, before the final products are delivered, they are packaged.

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