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The charts below show the number of tourists to Australia 🇦🇺 from three countries in 1995 and 2005, and the types of travels between 1995 and 2005. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the number of tourists to Australia 🇦🇺 from three countries in 1995 and 2005, and the types of travels between 1995 and 2005. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two charts show the numbers of people
visited
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who visited
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 Australia from
UK
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the UK
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 ,
USA
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the USA
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 and Japan with the methods of
traveling
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travelling
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 in
two
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the two
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 years 1995 and 2005. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective ,it is readily apparent that Jaban
was
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had
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 the highest number of
tourists
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 in 1995 ,
while
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 in 2005
UK
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the UK
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 and
USA
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the USA
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were
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had
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 the highest
tourists
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.Backpacking was the most important type of travel over the
10 years
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10-year
 period. Japan
tourists
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was
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were
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 almost
one
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million
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 and 400
tourists
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 in 1995 , which shows a
downwards
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downward
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 trend in 2005 by 400million
tourists
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. On
other
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the other
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 hand , UK and USA visitors
show
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showed
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 an
upwards
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upward
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 trend in 2005 to have the same number which was almost
one
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million
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 and 500
tourists
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 . Regarding the types of
travels
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travel
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 staying in
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the resort
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resort
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resorts
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 shows a
graduall
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gradual
gradually
 increase over the 10 years , it
is starting
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starts
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 from almost 400 thousand to end with almost
1million
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1 million
 and 200 thousand
tourists
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 prefer that type.
While
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 the most significant
types
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type
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 of
travels
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travel
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 all over the
giving
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given
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 period was
backpaking
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backpacking
 started with above
one
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million
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 and
half
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a half
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tourists
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 in 1995 to have a sudden drop in numbers in 2000 from almost two
million
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 and
half
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a half
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 to almost
one
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million
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 and 100 thousand
tourists
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prefer
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preferred
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this
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 method in 2005 .

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tourists, one, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 6 times.
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