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The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The maps illustrate the layout of the Southwest
airport
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Airport
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 now and after modernization in the following year.
Overall
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, the airport is expected to undergo a significant redevelopment, with several new facilities which will be built, namely, shops, a bag drop, an ATM, a car hire and a sky train.
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, it can be seen that the number of gates will be expanded from 8 to 18. At present, the plan of the airport looks simple, with a cafe and a check-in counter in the departure
zone
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 and 8 gates which are connected by a walkway.
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, there are not any facilities in the arrival
zone
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.
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 the maps, after an
upgrade
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upgrade,
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 the layout will be more sophisticated. In the departure
zone
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, a check-in counter will be relocated to the right,
while
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 a bag drop will be introduced to the left. A new cafe will be located next to the entrance,
whereas
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 shops will be placed right after the security and
the
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apply
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passport controls.
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, a sky train will replace a walkway and will connect the main terminal with 18 gates.
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, in the arrival
zone
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 will be added another cafe, an ATM and a car hire.

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coherence and cohesion
To improve the logical structure, consider organizing the information in a way that highlights the key differences between the current and future layouts more clearly. You could create a paragraph that specifically compares the before and after highlights.
coherence and cohesion
In your introduction, providing a brief overview of the key changes before diving deeper into specifics can strengthen your overall structure. This would also serve as a clear roadmap for the reader.
task achievement
Enhancing your descriptions of how the facilities will improve the passenger experience or adding some predictions about traffic flow can demonstrate more comprehensive ideas.
task achievement
The essay clearly identifies and describes the main features of the airport redevelopment, showing a good understanding of the task.
coherence and cohesion
Your use of comparative language was effective, such as 'now' and 'after an upgrade,' which helped clarify the changes.
task achievement
The specific details regarding the new facilities and their locations enhance the clarity of your response.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • terminal
  • runway
  • refurbishment
  • redevelopment
  • amenities
  • car park
  • hangar
  • concourse
  • public transport hub
  • access roads
  • boarding gates
  • check-in desk
  • baggage claim
  • departure lounge
  • observation deck
  • duty-free shopping
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