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Topic: Student should be taught academic knowledge so that they can pass exams, and skills such as cooking or dressing should not be taught. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Teachers should focus more on
acadmics
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academics
 so that children can pass examinations, rather
wasting
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than wasting
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 their
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efforts
effort
 on teaching
skills
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such
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 as cooking or dressing. I strongly stand with
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 idea and the
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reasons
 will be discussed in the upcoming paragraphs. In
this
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competive
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competitive
 world, people are getting fired,
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and on
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the
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apply
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top of that, university
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pass-outs
passports
pass outs
 are struggling to get employed because of
lack
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a lack
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 of practical
skills
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 and good grades. If education
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centres
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 waste their time,money and energy to teach
skills
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what
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that
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 someone can learn by a simple tutorial, they might get distracted and get low scores in their
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examinations
examination
.
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, high
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schools
 and universities should focus on training and building
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infrastructure
infrastructures
 which will help students to
practially
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practically
 test their knowledge and get good grades.
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,
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day to
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day
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skills
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 like cooking or dressing are important to a certain extent, it can be taught
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by
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 finding a link with the
acadmics
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academics
academic
. For
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instance
,
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 teaching thermodynamics professors can take
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 practical class
of
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in
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 cooking.
This
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 will help learners to learn the science behind and at the same time apply their learnings into
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day to
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skills
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. To summarize,
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schools
 and colleges
shoud
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should
 purely focus
teaching
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on teaching
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 primary subjects so that they can score maximum grades, but if they incorporate
day
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-to-
day
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Language Accuracy
Ensure there are no spelling errors (e.g., 'acadmics,' 'resons') and grammatical mistakes. For instance, 'wasting their effors on teaching...' should be rephrased for clarity.
Coherence
The introduction could more clearly outline your stance and the main points you will discuss, which helps the reader anticipate the essay's direction better.
Task Achievement
Try to include more examples or elaboration, especially in the body paragraphs, to strengthen your arguments and make them more convincing.
Content
You present a clear position in the introduction, indicating that you strongly agree with the focus on academic knowledge.
Coherence
There is a structure to your essay with an introduction, body, and conclusion, which provides a basic framework for your argument.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Balanced education
  • Real-world application
  • Holistic development
  • Self-reliance
  • Intellectual development
  • Well-rounded individuals
  • Critical thinking
  • Practical problem-solving
  • Future preparedness
  • Adaptability
  • Social and emotional benefits
  • Self-confidence
  • Fostering independence
  • Mental health
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