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The pie chart below shows the frequency of U.S Adults’ online purchasing habits in 2015, while the bar chart shows a further classification denoting online purchasing preference. Summarise the data by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart below shows the frequency of U.S Adults’ online purchasing habits in 2015, while the bar chart shows a further classification denoting online purchasing preference. Summarise the data by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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 the illustrated graph provides the rate of US adults who
shop
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 online during 2015, the graph shows the percentage of
people
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 who buy online and in a physical
shop
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. In
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 essay.
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, mostly older generations do shopping in stores so most of them rarely order something, and those who do it every week are more likely to
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 their stuff delivered. In the pie chart, there is a frequency of online shoppers divided into four categories depending on whether they
shop
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 often or less. From
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100%,
people
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 who had never shopped online before were 20%,
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, those who do it less often than
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 times a month are major 37%. Only 15% of
people
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 do online shopping every week which is less than some times a month 28%. The bar chart shows the rate of
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older
 generations
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 the same categories, but, with additional information about how often they prefer physical malls
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. Among all online shoppers only
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34%
humanity
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of humanity
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 shopped online rather
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than going
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 somewhere.
People
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 who
shop
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 online more often are likely to
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order
 more, and those who less,
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 at malls.
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, from both diagrams it is known that among the 100% of
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 less than 20 per-cent would order every week.
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, in 47% of cases weekly online shoppers rather than ordering choose stores.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words shop, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pie chart
  • bar chart
  • frequencies
  • rarely
  • preferential
  • classification
  • trend analysis
  • proportion
  • demographics
  • consumption patterns
  • e-commerce
  • sector
  • habitual
  • retail
  • consumer behavior
  • summative
  • quantitative data
  • interpret
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