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The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the frequency of eating at fast
food
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 restaurants among
people
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 in the USA over a decade, from 2003 to 2013.
Overall
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, the data reveals a gradual decline in moderate fast
food
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 consumption once or twice a
month
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 and an increase in both frequent consumption several
times
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 a
week
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 and complete fortrain never" over the decade.  In 2003, the highest percentage of
people
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 around 30% accounted
eating
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for eating
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 fast
food
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 "Once or twice a
month
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,"
while
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 the lowest percentage approximately 4% ate it  every day. The proportions for "Several
times
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 a
week
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" and once a
week
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 were similar, at about 15% and 12%, respectively. A significant portion of the population nearly 20% ate fast
food
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 only a few
times
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 a year, and around 5% claimed they never consumed it. By 2006, there was a slight decline in the percentage of
people
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 eating fast
food
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 once or twice a
month
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, dropping to about 25%. The frequency of every day remained stable,
while
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 several
times
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 a
week
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 saw a minor increase to around 18%. The never category
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 rose slightly to 7%. In 2013, the trend shifted
further
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. The proportion of
people
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 eating fast
food
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 once or twice a
month
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 continued to decrease, falling to just over 20%. Meanwhile, the several
times
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 a
week
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 category grew to nearly 20%, and the
once a
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once-a-week
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week
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 group remained steady at around 12%. The never category reached its peak at roughly 10%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, people, month, times, week with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • frequency
  • fluctuation
  • trend
  • stabilize
  • decline
  • highlight
  • reduction
  • reliance
  • eating habits
  • population segment
  • weekly basis
  • rarely
  • initial decrease
  • dine
  • establishments
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