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Some people think that the traditional skill of letter writing will completely disappear due to the increasing use of mobile phones and the Internet. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion？

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mobiles
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 phones and the Internet have revolutionized modern life, growing concerns persist regarding the
completely
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 disappearance of
the
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traditional
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letter writing
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letter-writing
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 skills. In my
opionion
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opinion
, I agree that
individual’s
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an individual’s
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 ability of
latter
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later
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skill
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 will decline, but not fully
vanished
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. There are several factors contributing to the decline of people’s
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later
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 writing
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skill
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skills
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. First and foremost, people tend to rely on modern technologies like smartphones and
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computers because of their efficiency. For
intance
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instance
, a message or a simple phone call can reach people miles away without any geographical boundaries or time
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,
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compared
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 to
hand-writting
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hand-writing
hand-written
 letters that consume several days
for
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delievering
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delivering
.
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, individuals who use social media
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via
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 mobiles phones and the Internet can express themselves in
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 entertaining and joyful way by sending
vedios
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videos
 and funny
menes
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memes
. Eventually, the tendency
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 digital tools has worsened their skills of writing
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letter
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letters
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.
However
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,
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letter writing
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skill
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skills
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is
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 still vital nowadays on some occasions.
Letter
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, especially a hand-writing one, has its own personal touch and sentimental meaning
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 to other options of
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delivering
 messages.
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, during Valentine’s Day, couples tend to write love letters to each other to express their
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affection
 and enthusiasm sincerely.
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, in professional
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workplaces
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, officials tend to admit candidates with proper academic
letter
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 writing
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skill
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skills
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.
Delievering
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Delivering
 formal letters to
bussiness
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business
 companions to ask for
corporation
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cooperation
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 or to
the
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seniors to
inqure
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inquire
the
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advices
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advice
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are
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 still more proper than simply sending a message. In conclusion, though I agree
the
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 statement that
a
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an
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 uptick
of
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in
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mobiles
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mobile
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 phones and
the
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Internet usage
lead
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leads
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 to the loosing of conventional
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letter writing
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letter-writing
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 skills, the ability
of
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it
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will not completely
disapper
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disappear
 because of its special meaning and formal trait.

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Task Achievement
Make sure to clearly state your opinion in the introduction and maintain that stance throughout the essay.
Coherence and Cohesion
Enhance the connection between ideas by using more cohesive devices, such as 'however', 'in addition', or 'for this reason'.
General Advice
Proofread for spelling and grammatical errors, as these can detract from the overall clarity of your writing.
Task Achievement
You have addressed the topic well and presented a clear argument regarding the decline of letter-writing skills.
Task Achievement
Your examples, such as Valentine’s Day letters, effectively illustrate your points and add depth to your argument.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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