The graph below shows the percentage of the Australian workforce in five industries between 1962 and 2012.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the percentage of the Australian workforce in five industries between 1962 and 2012.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graph below shows the percentage of the Australian workforce in five industries between 1962 and 2012.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The information presented in the chart gives us an insight into the duration that graduates read each day at five different universities.
Overall
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, it is evident that
from
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the
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insitute
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institute
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C had more number of students
study
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studying
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at
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on
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weekdays
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while
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in
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at
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weekends
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the students from University A stood
at
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in
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first
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the first
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place.
However
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, C has
less
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fewer
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reading students
throughtout
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throughout
the week. In detail, the pupils from
university
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A
learn
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9.8
hours
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during
weekdays
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but there was a minimal decrease to 9
hours
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per day
in
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at
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weekends
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.
on the other hand
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, B and E universities had almost equal
hours
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in
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on
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weekdays
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of 10.1 and 10 respectively but there was a decline to 8.6 and 6.2
in
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on
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weekdays
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.
Moreover
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, the learners from C had 10.6
hours
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per day
in
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at
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weekend
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but
then
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there was a slight decrement to 7.8 on
weekends
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.
Lastly
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, trainees from university D
has
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a
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the
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lowest
readers
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number of readers
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on
weeddays
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weekdays
as well as
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on
weekends
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among all with 9.6
hours
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and 5.6
hors
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hours
individually.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words weekdays, weekends, hours with synonyms.
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