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Some people think that it should be compulsory for people to retake their driving test every 5 years. What are the advantages and disavantages of doing this?

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In today’s world, driving a
car
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 is the most popular and common transportation
due to
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 its convenience.
However
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, some
people
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 think it should be an obligation to retake the driving licence for 5 years. In
this
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 essay, I will outline the pros and cons of both sides. In the beginning, refreshing the
driver
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test
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 ensures
maintain
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that maintain
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 drivers
in
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apply
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their level of driving, which leads to
limit
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 the
car
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 accidents that happen because of the elders and adults who lack-
check
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checks
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up
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apply
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.
For instance
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, a New York magazine published a study that shows 40% of
car
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accident
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occurred in Japan because of the age
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of peopl
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peopl
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people
 who diagnosed with short eyesight.
On the other hand
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, some individuals
precivethat
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perceive that
 taking the
driver
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's
test
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 again is time-consuming
especially
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, especially
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 for workers with
full-timetime
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full-time time
full-time-time
 jobs and families.
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 to
that
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 a significant citizen considers the cost of taking the
driver
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test
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 every five years.
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, city dwellers find
this
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 decision inconvenient especially low-income workers
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, these
people
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 cannot afford the cost of living.
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 to that, numerous
people
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 do not have enough time with their family the government should focus on giving them extra time. In conclusion, forcing drivers to retake the
driver
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test
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 every five years has many benefits one of them the increase the safety in the country from
car
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 accidents. There are
also
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 drawbacks
wasting
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 time and money. The government should Just compulsory a health check and make the
test
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 free to not overwhelm
people
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 and to
toenacting
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enact
efficient laws.

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Ensure your thesis statement clearly states what the essay will discuss, and consider providing a brief overview of the advantages and disadvantages in the introduction.
coherence and cohesion
Work on structuring your paragraphs more clearly, making sure each paragraph focuses on one main idea, and develop that idea thoroughly.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to proofread for spelling and grammatical errors, as these can distract from your ideas and affect the overall clarity of your argument.
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The essay addresses both sides of the argument, which is a good approach for discussing the advantages and disadvantages.
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The use of examples helps to illustrate your points and adds depth to your argument.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • compulsory
  • driving test
  • road safety
  • traffic laws
  • driving regulations
  • refresh
  • skills
  • unfit drivers
  • economic burden
  • logistical challenges
  • inconvenience
  • public discontent
  • accelerate
  • road conditions
  • test appointment
  • deteriorated
  • practicing driving
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