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Band 3

Some believe that modern technology is increasing the gap between rich and poor people, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is often argued that technology
creats
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creates
 a huge gap between wealthy and poor individuals.
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notion
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 because
it
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wealthy individuals can afford the expenses of high-speed
internet
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 and Artificial Intelligence replaces the
jobs
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 that
lower class
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lower-class
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 citizens do. Supporting my agreement, I firmly believe that unequal access to
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the internet
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internet
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 makes a huge difference between higher-class and
lower class
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 citizens.
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, people who have
enogh
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enough
 money
,
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 can afford the latest devices and high-speed
internet
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, resulting
to
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 more updates about world affairs and based on that they can take proper
step
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 to protect their businesses.
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, Starlink, which is the most expensive
internet
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 service in the world, can be afforded by the
first class
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 residents of a country only, and in case of
internet
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 disruption, it is
then
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mere
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a mere
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 option
of
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 getting
this
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 important
sevice
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service
.
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 it makes dissimilarities for rich and poor people.
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- and very importantly- the invention of Artificial intelligence, which is highly skilled for automation service at work, decreased the labour-type
jobs
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 that used to be performed by poor workers. More precisely, handy
jobs
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such
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 as bindings,
packagings
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packaging
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, and
boxings
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 in a factory are being done now by automated
mechine
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machines
,
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, many people lost their
jobs
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 and
relying
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 on
government
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the government
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 for their daily expenses.

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task achievement
Ensure that you clearly state your viewpoint in the introduction. While you agree with the notion, explicitly stating your position strengthens your argument.
coherence cohesion
Try to maintain a consistent flow in your arguments by using more cohesive devices (e.g., linking words) to connect ideas smoothly.
task achievement
Consider providing a more balanced view by discussing the opposing perspective more thoroughly before stating your opinion.
coherence cohesion
Make sure you proofread for spelling and grammatical errors. Words like 'creats,' 'dissimitlarities', and 'mechine' could distract the reader from your argument.
task achievement
You introduced the topic clearly and provided a clear thesis statement indicating your position on the issue.
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You provided specific examples, such as Starlink, that illustrate your points about technology and inequality.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • disparity
  • modern technology
  • automation
  • artificial intelligence
  • job market
  • infrastructure
  • accessibility
  • economic growth
  • entrepreneurship
  • social initiatives
  • disadvantaged communities
  • opportunities
  • prosperity
  • digital divide
  • resource allocation
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