The chart below gives information about the number of books rented in a British local library in 2009.

The chart below gives information about the number of books rented in a British local library in 2009.
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The diagram illustrates the
number
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of
books
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rented in
Malton
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Town
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Library
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over a period of 12
months
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in 2009.
Overall
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,
books
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rented in
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the british
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british
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British
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local
library
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was remained
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remained
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stable between April- July 2009. The
number
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was relatively fluctuate over the
year
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.
Furthermore
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, the
books
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rented at
Malton
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Town
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Library
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reach
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reached
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its peak
at the
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end
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of
survey
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in December 2009 with 21
books
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rented.
Otherwise
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, in February 2009 the
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people
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number of people
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who rented the
books
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from
Malton
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Town
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Library
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was at the lowest amount throughout the
year
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, with only 6
people
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who rented the
books
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. In the first month (January),
people
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who rented
the
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apply
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books
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from
Malton
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Town
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Library
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they
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apply
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stood at 10 and slumped slightly
in
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to
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6
on
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in
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February.
At march
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In March
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, the
books
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rented in a
Malton
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Town
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Library
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was remain
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remained
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stable.
Following
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this
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, the
number
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of
books
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rented in
Malton
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Town
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Library
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started to show significant growth and almost doubled than previous month. In the middle of the
year
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(April-
July)
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July),
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the trend
was remained
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remained
has remained
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stable until it
got
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apply
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fluctuated again until the
end
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of the
year
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.
At
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In
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August, the
number
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of
people
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who rent the book from
Malton
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Town
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Library
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increased
5
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by 5
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people
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.
Then
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, dropped again for almost half in September. The
number
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of
books
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slightly
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was slightly
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higher
on
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in
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October and dipped again in November.
At the
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end
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of the
year
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, the
number
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of
people
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who rent the book from British Local
Library
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was grow
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grew
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dramatically and
finally
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reach
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reached
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its peak
on
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in
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December.
To sum up
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, at the first of 3
months
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, the
number
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of
books
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rented in
Malton
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Town
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Library
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is relatively lower than
other
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in other
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months
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,
following
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followed
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by
middle
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the middle
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of the
months
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(April-July) the trend
remain
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remains
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steady, and
finally
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at the
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end
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of the
year
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, the
number
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of
people
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who rented the
books
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from
Malton
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Town
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Library
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started to increase and reached its highest
number
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in December 2009.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end, finally".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, books, malton, town, library, months, year, end, people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 7 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuate" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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