Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a/qualification. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Nowadays, pupils are interested in learning various
subjects
in addition
to their main field
. Although
some individuals believe that students
should concentrate on their main courses to become experts in a specific subject and gain
high scores in their courses, in the modern days it is necessary to be a multi-task person and have knowledge
about various fields
, and I believe that learning different fields
can help students
to gain
suitable job opportunities.
Many people and teachers believe that when students
select a subject they should be committed to gaining more knowledge
about the field
. In other words
, they should not waste their time on other topics and it culminates in deep learning about their main subject and achieving to high score. Furthermore
, By focusing on multiple subjects
not only do students
spend their time on different tasks, but also
their minds become more busy with different subjects
and it avoids gaining the best scores. For instance
, in the US universities do not allow students
to particularly work after their academic time and they believe that pupils should focus on their main fields
. While
it may affect their performance, learning different topics can form students
for the future because companies
need staff who have knowledge
about various fields
due to
their widespread business.
On the other hand
, having knowledge
about various fields
is thought to be necessary to achieve promotion and success in professional life. There is no doubt that companies
would rather employ a person who is an expert in both main and side fields
because he can do various tasks in the company. Moreover
, if they focus on different subjects
during the academic life their personalities are formed as multi-task individuals. For example
, many companies
which work in the oil field
would prefer to employ graduated students
who not only do they have suitable knowledge
about their field
not have the best score in their main major, but also
have knowledge
about data science and can speak fluent English. In my opinion, doing different activities during academic life can increase our experience and can impress companies
to employ us.
In conclusion, although
some people believe that students
should focus on their main major to avoid any disturbance and gain
high scores, in the modern era, being a multi-task person is a basic demand to gain
more achievement in their careers and I believe that it can help students
to find suitable jobs easily.Submitted by hadadianmohamadhossein on
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While the essay provides relevant examples, there is room to elaborate on these examples and make them more specific and impactful.
task achievement
Aim to balance the discussion more evenly. Currently, there is slightly more focus on the benefits of learning different subjects rather than focusing on the main subject alone.
task achievement
The essay provides a comprehensive response to the task, addressing both views and providing a personal opinion with relevant explanations.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph has a clear main idea and is logically ordered, aiding in the overall coherence of the essay.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are both present and well-constructed, effectively framing the essay and summarizing the main points.
Word Count
IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.
A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.
Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.