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In the past, people used to travel to see the differences from their home country. However, the sceneries in places around the world seem similar nowadays. What are the causes of these similarities? Do you think that the advantages of these similarities outweigh the disadvantages?

Exploring different
places
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 to identify and explore different
places
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,
culture
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cultures
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 and traditions by travelling is the main purpose behind people doing it,
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 in terms of sightseeing most of the infrastructure is
same
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the same
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 in all the countries
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 globalization,
exposure
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and exposure
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 of techniques. It is much
benefical
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beneficial
 still to travel as it has more advantages than disadvantages. In today's world with technological advancement, we have an opportunity to explore
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different
part
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 of the world virtually, which
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 as a catalyst in communication thereby
transfering
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transferring
of
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knowledge that
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 us to adopt what's been suited and best based on the given conditions at that point of time leading to the growth and development. To add on, Travelling for sightseeing is one of the major reasons if only that's the main objective behind it.
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, exploring different
places
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 around the world teaches us about their culture, diving deep into their food habits and daily life.
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: An
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 family won't let go
their
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 children
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after they turn 18 when compared to
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the United
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 States of America.
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, Exploring different
places
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 can be done virtually as well as
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physical
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physically
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. being immersive,
indulding
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indulging
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in their life and
experinecing
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experiencing
 the life through their own view is what makes
this
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travveling
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travelling
 special and memorable.

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task achievement
The introduction could be clearer by stating a more defined position regarding whether the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. Additionally, try to rephrase some sentences for clarity and impact.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that links back to the main argument of the essay. This will help improve the logical flow of ideas.
task achievement
In your examples, make sure to elaborate more on the cultural differences and how they impact the view of traveling. This would enhance the depth of the arguments presented.
content
The essay presents some interesting ideas about globalization and cultural differences, which are relevant to the topic.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Globalization
  • Homogenization
  • Architectural uniformity
  • Cultural exchange
  • International brands
  • Tourism industry
  • Urban design
  • Economic development
  • Proliferation of media
  • Cultural norms
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