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The bar chart displays the percentage of people who ate fast food in five countries in 2020.

The bar chart displays the percentage of people who ate fast food in five countries in 2020.
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The bar chart compares the proportion of people consuming fast
food
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 regularly in five countries in the year 2020.
Overall
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, fast
food
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 was more popular in
Country
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 A and
Country
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 B,
whereas
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 it was least consumed in
Country
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 E.
Country
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 A had the highest percentage, with around 70% of the population eating fast
food
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 frequently.
Country
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 B followed closely, at about 65%.
In contrast
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, the other three countries reported significantly lower consumption.
Country
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 C had approximately 50%,
while
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Country
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 D showed a similar rate, slightly below 50%.
Country
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 E had the lowest rate, with only around 30% of its population eating fast
food
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. The chart highlights a clear trend: fast
food
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 consumption was much higher in certain countries.
Country
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 A,
in particular
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, stood out with a significantly higher percentage.
This
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 may reflect lifestyle differences, urbanization, or cultural habits.
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, the data suggests a variation in fast
food
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 preference depending on the
country
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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