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Band 3.5

Some people believe that we should have a four-day working week and still be paid the same. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Nowadays, people working five
days
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 a
week
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 are unable to spend quality time with their families and friends.
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, some people believe that the working
days
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 should be reduced to
four
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days
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 a
week
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. I somewhat agree
to
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 the notion and will give my opinions in the upcoming paragraphs. On the one hand,
making
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doing
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job
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a job
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 just for
four
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days
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 a
week
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 will foster mental stability.
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, recently
samsung
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 passed
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 proposal and stats showed that
the
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apply
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mental stability and
work
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 productivity
got
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apply
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improved which benefited both
company
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the company
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 and
employees
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its employees
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.
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,
this
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 will give
a
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them a
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chance to spend more time with their families,
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improves
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familiy
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family
 relationships. To add on, having three
days
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 off will provide individuals more self time which will help to improve their cons and
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 improve
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 efficiency. Employees can focus
to learn
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on learning
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 some new skills which can help them to achieve success in their
career
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careers
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.
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, promoting
this
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 idea can lead to more
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work load
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workload
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. To give an example, a particular
work
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 or project
will
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is
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 now supposed to be finished in
four
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days
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 rather than five.
This
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 idea could only lead to more
work
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 efficiency in the starting
days
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 of the
week
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,
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however
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however,
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 as the
days
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 spent
this
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 efficiency and productivity would have a greater impact in a negative way.
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, the idea of promoting
four
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days
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work
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 at
work
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 can definitely lead to
positive
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a positive
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 outcome to some extent but the disadvantages cannot be neglected.

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task achievement
Ensure that your main points are more thoroughly elaborated to support your arguments more strongly. For example, provide more details on how productivity can be affected over a longer period.
coherence and cohesion
Try to make your introduction more engaging and clearly outline your stance on the issue. Also, be sure that your conclusion summarizes your main points effectively.
language
Make sure that you proofread your work to correct minor grammatical issues, such as 'passed this proposal' (should be 'passed a proposal') and 'improves familiy relationships' (should be 'family relationships').
content
You have successfully introduced the topic and stated your position clearly in the introduction.
examples
Your use of examples (Samsung's proposal) contributes to the strength of your arguments.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • work-life balance
  • productivity
  • mental health
  • efficiency
  • carbon emissions
  • traffic congestion
  • economic implications
  • hobbies
  • adjusting
  • continuous service
  • feasible
  • initially
  • concentration
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