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Band 2.5

You have begun a new course at university and the professor gave you the first assignment of the course. You are not sure how to write the assignment.

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Dear Professor Adam I am writing
this
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 letter to ask a guidance regarding the first assignment of the course.
While
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 I have read through the instructions, I am not entirely sure how to structure my response.
Firstly
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, I will start with that my name is John Dillinger and I am
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a second
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second course
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second-course
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 student studying
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in
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for
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degree
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the degree
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of
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 business. The first thing I would like to draw your attention to is that
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 is our first task, I want to make sure that I am on the right track and meet your expectations. I would really appreciate it if we could schedule a short meeting to discuss the assignment in more detail. I am available on Monday , but I can adjust my schedule to suit yours if needed. Thank you very much for your time and support. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours sincerely, John Dillinger

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The introduction is clear, but it could benefit from a more formal opening statement that specifies the purpose of the letter more clearly.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that your points are organized more logically by grouping similar ideas together. Consider using paragraphs to separate ideas for better readability.
task achievement
You might want to elaborate on what specific guidance you are seeking for the assignment to show clarity in your request.
positive
The tone of the letter is polite and respectful, which is essential for a formal communication.
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Offering to adjust your schedule shows flexibility and willingness to collaborate, which is commendable.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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