Many criminals commit further crimes as soon as they released from prison. What do you think are the causes of this? What possible solutions can you suggest?

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Part of offenders perpetrate crimes,after getting in freedom. Thousands of crimes
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criminals in Kurdakhani prison.Most of them got their traumas in their childhood.
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attention,in future trying to take revenge for their past times.And they make it on civil people,most probably they do not know.
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do not want to return home.They know that after coming back home they will face their nagging wife and stupid children.
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,because they want to be far from
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life.If they have respect in jail it is very comfortable to live there.Because there no one will annoy them.
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only men. The conclusion,a portion of offenders reoffend after being released.

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coherence and cohesion
Ensure a stronger introduction that clearly outlines the essay's main points. The thesis statement could be clearer in stating both causes and suggested solutions.
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Expand on your examples for stronger support. Provide more detail or statistics to bolster your claims about psychological trauma and the prison environment.
coherence and cohesion
Use appropriate paragraphing to separate distinct ideas more clearly. This helps in organizing your thoughts and makes it easier for the reader to follow your argument.
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You provide a relevant context for discussing the causes of re-offending, touching on psychological trauma and the prison environment.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Rehabilitation
  • Reintegrate
  • Social stigma
  • Recidivism
  • Criminal records
  • Ex-offender
  • Associations
  • Comprehensive
  • Workforce
  • Mentoring
  • Incentivize
  • Stigmatize
  • Subsidies
  • Legitimate
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