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Writing Samples
Band 5

You are going on a month training programme to the UK and know that the head of the course would like one of the participants to be the social events' organiser. Write a letter to the Training Organiser. In your letter • expressing your interest in the role • requesting more information about it • explaining what experience you have Begin your letter as follows: Dear ...,

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Dear training in
UK
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the UK
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,
Im
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I am
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writing
wiriting
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writing
this
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 letter to inquire about
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organiser
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the organiser
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 role, I hope
this
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 letter will show how much I'm
interesting
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 in the role of
organiser
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. I find
this
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 programme
is fits
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 my personality of organized ,and I requesting
for
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apply
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more information about it, whether it's for
organised
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an organised
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 crowd or an event Since
i
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I
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 have the right
experience
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 for both of them . I had past
experience
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 in organizing
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a crowrd
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crowrd
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crowd
crowned
 in 2023 I was the
organiser
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 for
clothes
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a clothes
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 shop that
has
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had
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grand
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 opening you will find the
experience
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 form in the attachment. I
also
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 have
experience
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 as an event
organiser
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, were
i
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I
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 gained
it
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apply
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recently and I trained for almost 6 months, there for i sure im the right one for the job and I hope
i
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I
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 can get it since
i
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I
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 have the right qualifications .
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, you can find the form
of
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for
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 organizing
event
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the event
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 down below next to the crowd form Kind regards

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grammar
Ensure accurate spelling and grammar in your letter.
coherence
Clearly separate your points into paragraphs for better readability.
tone
Provide a more formal closing for the letter to enhance professionalism.
task achievement
You expressed genuine interest in the role of organiser.
task achievement
You provided relevant experience that supports your application.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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