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Some people think that the best way to improve the road safety is by reducing the speed limit. Others think that there are other ways to improve road safety. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

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In recent years,
road
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safety
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is
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has been
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number
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 one priority for everyone. Some groups of people believe that reducing
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 speed
limit
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 is the only way
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 betterment.
Whereas
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, others think that there are numerous ways that we can consider
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road
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safety
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. I will discuss both views with reasons and relevant examples
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 my opinion in the following essay.
To begin
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 the speed
limit
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 for
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apply
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vehicles is very essential for individuals. The predominant reason is that the chances of collisions are reduced by maintaining the speed
limit
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according to
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 rules and regulations.
As a result
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, one can ride their vehicles without any fear. To illustrate, a study by the University of Waterloo mentioned that 40% of accidents
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happened
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happen
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 on the highways are decreased
due to
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 reducing the speed
limit
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.
On the other hand
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, we cannot ignore that there are several other ways which are
also
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 beneficial in regards to
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this
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 issue. First and foremost, building
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wider roads can be the best way to
minimal
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traffic
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 congestion.
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, people will not face any accidents in the busier areas and during the busiest
time
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times
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.
Moreover
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, proper
traffic
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 lights at every intersection are
also
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 required for
safety
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.
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, with the use of
traffic
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 lights, pedestrians can conveniently cross the roads which can lessen the collisions. Apart from that, the government should impose fines for those individuals who are riding their vehicles without following
traffic
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 and
road
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safety
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 rules.
To conclude
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,
according to
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 my opinion, reviewing other aspects
such
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 as
construction
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 of
best
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the best
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road ways
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roadways
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, having strict rules and other required facilities can be more helpful for people rather than reducing the speed
limit
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As well as
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 applying fines and demerit points is essential for
road
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safety
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.

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Expand on your supporting points with more examples or details to strengthen your argument.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that your transitions between points are clear to enhance the flow of your essay.
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Clarify your opinion in the conclusion by summarizing the key arguments made for both views before stating your view more emphatically.
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The essay addresses both views and provides a balanced discussion, showing an understanding of the topic.
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The use of a relevant example from the University of Waterloo adds credibility to your argument about speed limits.
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