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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The line chart compares the production, in amount of
energy
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, of three different fuels - petroleum, natural gas, and coal - in the United Kingdom, over a nineteen-year period, from 1981 to 2000.
Overall
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, the highest proportion is allocated to Petroleum,
wich
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which
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 is the main fuel in the UK.
However
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, its trend fluctuates over the years.
Similarly
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, the produced
energy
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 from coal changes from 1981 to 2000, without a constant pattern. Natural gas,
instead
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, increased sharply. Petroleum started from
rough
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roughly
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 90
energy
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 units in 1981,
then
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 it grew consistently, reaching 140
energy
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 units in 1986.
After
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this
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 year, it
drop
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dropped
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, to increase again from 1991 to 2000, with some marginal fluctuations during the period. The production of coal,
instead
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, started at 80
energy
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unit
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units
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 in 1981,
then
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 it
fall
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fell
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 significantly in one year of
an
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a
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 half. It showed again an upward trend, but from 1986 to 2000 it decreased
costantly
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constantly
. The production history of natural gas is different from the one of the other fuels. From 1981 to 1989 it did not change, stopping at 40
energy
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unit
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units
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. After that year, it
start
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started
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 to grow enormously, peaking in 2000 at 100
energy
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unit
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units
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.
Therefore
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, there were marginal fluctuations, in 1996 and 1997.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "instead".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuates" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "marginal" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fuel production
  • Trend
  • Steady
  • Fluctuations
  • Significant
  • Milestones
  • Turning point
  • Peak
  • Decline
  • Evolve
  • Notable
  • Summarize
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