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The bar graph below shows the average housing costs in three different regions for two different years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting in the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar graph below shows the average housing costs in three different regions for two different years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting in the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph shows the average
costs
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 of housing in rural, suburban, and urban
areas
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 in 2010 and 2020. The
prices
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 are different in each of the three
areas
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, but we can see that the
costs
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 of each area rise significantly in the period shown on the graph. We can observe a significant increase in the housing cost in both 2010 and 2020. The average cost in rural
areas
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 is the lowest we can see,
that
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in 2010 the
prices
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 were at 75000 $ and in 2020 at 125000 $. The
prices
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 in suburban
areas
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 are higher than
rural
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in rural
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areas
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 by approximately 15000 $ in 2010 and even higher by more than double in 2020. The housing
costs
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 are the highest in urban
areas
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, being double those in rural
areas
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 in both years. There is growth in the
prices
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 of housing between 2010 and 2020. The rural
areas
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 rose from 75000 $ to 125000 $. Housing
costs
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 in suburban
areas
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 almost tripled, rising from 100000 $ to 275000 $ Housing
costs
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 in urban
areas
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 doubled, increasing from 150000$ to 300000 $.
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, despite the increase in housing
prices
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, rural
areas
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 are still the cheapest, unlike the urban
areas
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, which were the highest. The highest growth was in suburban
areas
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, where their
prices
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 almost tripled in the period shown in the graph.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words costs, areas, prices with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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