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The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010 Sumarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010 Sumarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided two pie charts illustrate and compare
between
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the household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia for the year
of
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2010. The data is expressed as
percentage
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 for each expenditure.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that a significant change is evident in viewing preferences over the decade. Other goods and services showed the largest percentage.
In addition
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, the housing followed a conversant
rate
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.
Whereas
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, the food expenditure remained
in
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 a similar
rate
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According to
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 what is shown, the other goods and services
was
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 a dominant method, accounting for 24% in Japan.
However
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, a
declined change
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 to around 26% in Malaysia.
By contrast
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, the housing in Japan was 21% and rose to about 34% in Malaysia. the food
rate
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 was 24% and showed a slow growth to around 27% for
the
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2010. the graph highlights a clear trend, the expenditures among households were higher in certain types. the housing,
in particular
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, stood out with a significantly highest
rate
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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