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You have just finished a language course provided by your company and want an- other. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter you should say: - why you liked the course - why you need more - and say where and when the course should take place

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Dear
sir
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Sir
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/madam, I am writing
this
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 letter to inform you that I have completed an
english
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English
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language
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course
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 that was offered by our company. Now, I am keen to
enroll
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enrol
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 in
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a french
the french
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french
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French
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language
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course
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. I learnt tremendous things from the
course
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.
First,
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It was
great
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a great
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 time to
know
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learn
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 about other workers from different
department
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departments
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. I liked the teaching methods of the teachers. Whenever we found any problem, they solved our
diffculties
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difficulties
 in
easy
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an easy
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 way. As we live in Canada,
so
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apply
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having knowledge of
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the french
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french
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French
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language
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 is crucial to
deal
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dealing
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 with customers and other entrepreneurs. Because people from some provinces
such
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 as Ottawa speak
french
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French
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language
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. In order to communicate with them, it is important to learn
french
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French
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. I would like to suggest
place
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the place
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 and time of the
french
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French
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course
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 classes.
Hall
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The hall
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that is
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 situated
in
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on
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 the second floor is the ideal place to
held
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hold
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 the
course
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 because other employees
from
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apply
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can
also
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 attend it in the hall. The french
course
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 should
be start
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be started
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 from next month so that we can complete it earlier. I am looking positive from you.
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Yours
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Your
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Yours
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 faithfully, Rupinder Kaur.

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task achievement
Consider adding an opening statement that directly addresses the purpose of your letter, such as expressing hope that you are well.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to proofread for minor spelling and grammatical errors, such as 'english' (it should be 'English') and 'diffculties' (it should be 'difficulties').
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single main idea while still supporting your overall purpose in writing to facilitate better flow.
task achievement
You effectively expressed your appreciation for the previous course and the benefits it brought.
task achievement
Your request for future courses was clearly articulated, showing good understanding of your needs.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • enjoyment
  • positive learning environment
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • benefit
  • communication
  • training
  • professional development
  • career progression
  • convenient
  • accommodate
  • participation
  • course suggestion
  • time frame
  • location
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