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Band 4.5

Some countries have introduced a law to limit working hours for employees. Why is this law introduced? Do you think it is a positive or a negative development?

Nearly a third
percent
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 of
people
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 consider that when recruiting , companies should aim to take on
people
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 who are innovative and able to
work
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 individually,
while
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other
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others
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 consider they should recruit
people
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 who are able to
work
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 in a
team
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 with teammates
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follow
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 instructions. On one hand ,
take
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 on
people
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 who are innovative and able to
work
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 independently can bring significant advantages to a
company
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 . These
employees
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 , often think outside the box , offer fresh perspectives and can drive the
company
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 forward with new ideas . In
field
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fields
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 like technology , startup,
research
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and research
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 which can be crucial for growth . Independent
workers
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 can manage tasks with minimal control , which upward effective and downward pressure
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manager
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.
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this
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 kind of
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workers
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has
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 disadvantaged .
Employees
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 can struggle with collaboration
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 or have
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 time
in
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 basic procedures.
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hand
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 recruiting
employees
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 with
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a team
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team
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teamwork
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work
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 kind of type
have
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 one main advantage is
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influence
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to
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productive
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 part of any project .
Workers
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preferring
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prefer
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team
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teamwork
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work
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 ,
they
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and they
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 consider many ideas in
workplace
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the workplace
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 .
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 but not least is that ,
this
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 kind of
tasks
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task
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 can
divide
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 into sub -
group
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groups
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. Which
save
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the
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time
for
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 finishing the
work
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 .
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 ,
this
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 type of
work
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 has limits in their
work
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 . As evidence of
this
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work
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work,
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 if they continue following the rules and
scary
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are scared
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 of trying new stuff , they
involves
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company
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to
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way
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 to levelled off
with
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missing growth ,
also
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opportunity
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opportunities
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to
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for
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 improvement. I believe
solution
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the solution
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of
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 it is
stay
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balance
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.
Of
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 you want recruiting to
you
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your
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company
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employees
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 you should use both
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 of
workers
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 in a
team
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 and consider tasks for each of them , analyzing ,
being
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and being
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 ensure
in
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they
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their
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 skills . Innovative
workers
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 will
be
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drive
forward
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the forward
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 project and
team
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workers
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 will deal with smoothy following the task.

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task achievement
Ensure your introduction clearly outlines your main argument and reflects the question asked. Make your position clear from the beginning.
coherence and cohesion
Work on improving the flow of your ideas. Try using linking words and phrases more effectively to connect your thoughts.
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Provide more specific examples to support your arguments. This will enhance the clarity of your points and strengthen your essay overall.
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You have identified both sides of the argument and provided insight into the advantages and disadvantages of each type of employee.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • work-life balance
  • productivity
  • well-being
  • fatigue
  • stress
  • mental health
  • innovation
  • leisure industry
  • economic impact
  • labor costs
  • competitiveness
  • workforce
  • part-time workers
  • shift workers
  • sectors
  • cultural shift
  • personal time
  • global impact
  • standardizing
  • employee well-being
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