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The line graph shows visit to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999. The bar chart shows the most popular countries visited by UK resident in 1999. gp

The line graph shows visit to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999. The bar chart shows the most popular countries visited by UK resident in 1999. gp
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The line chart depicts the number of overseas travellers visiting Britain and the
UK
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 residents going abroad in a twenty-year period from 1979 to 1999,
while
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 the bar graph shows five countries that the
UK
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people
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 preferred to visit in 1999.
Overall
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,
according to
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 the line graph, it can be seen that an increase was observed in both groups over the period given.
Moreover
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,the figure for
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 residents going outside the country experienced significant growth,
while
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 the figure for visitors coming to the
UK
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 saw a lower rate of increase.
Furthermore
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, to talk about the bar chart, France was the most popular destination among British
people
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, followed closely by Spain. To start off, Both figures started from approximately 10
million
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people
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 in 1979.
Although
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 the number of
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 travellers and
UK
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 visitors witnessed a gradual rise until around 1986 with the former rising to around 20
million
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people
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, and the latter going up to just over 10
million
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people
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. There was a sharp rise in both groups until the end of the given period. British traveller numbers skyrocketed to above 50
million
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people
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, compared to the number of
UK
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 visitors at just below 30
million
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people
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. Moving on to the bar chart, British
people
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 loved to visit France and Spain the most, accounting for above 10
million
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people
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 and around 9
million
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people
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, respectively.
Whereas
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, USA, Greece, and Turkey saw a minor popularity at roughly below 3
million
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people
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, people, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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