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The appearance of Sanditon Beach before and after the construction of an airport

The map provides key information about the development of Sanditon
Beach
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town
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 after the construction of the
airport
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.
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, it is clear from the map that there was a noticeable improvement in the
town
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 after the
airport
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 was built.
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, new roads have been built, and the houses
grow
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 larger. Numerous hotels are constructed in front of the
beach
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,
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 before the exitance of the
airport
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 the
town
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 has a lot of empty spaces and only one road that leads to it.
According to
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 what is shown, before the
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airport
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airport,
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 the
town
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is
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 hard to reach because there was only one way to get there, and it was by using a car. On the
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beach
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beach,
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 there was only one hotel and four small summer houses, and it is usually used to spend the vacation. The
beach
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 was suitable for tourists. After the building of the
airport
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, the
town
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 area and economy expanded, new hotels
have been
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 built,
the
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and the
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 houses opposite the
beach
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 were demolished and moved to
new
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a new
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 area near the
airport
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. A new dock has been built, and the
beach
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became
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has become
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 more appropriate for visitors. A new road has been established leading directly to the
beach
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.

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task achievement
In your introduction, consider providing a brief overview of what the maps represent, such as mentioning the time periods before and after the airport's construction.
coherence and cohesion
Try to ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single main point to enhance clarity and flow. This will improve the overall structure of your essay.
task achievement
Include more specific details or comparisons to further support your main ideas. For example, you could mention how the number of tourists might have changed or the variety of services offered by the new hotels.
task achievement
You provided a clear overall assessment of the changes in Sanditon Beach after the airport's construction, which helps guide the reader through your essay.

Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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