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The pie chart shows the percentage of women in poverty and the bar chart shows poverty rates by sex and age. They are from the United States in 2008.

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The two tables provide data on urban
traffic
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 speed and the number of urban
zones
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 in nine countries from 1970 to 2020 (estimated). Table (a) displays the general
traffic
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 speed in kilometres per hour (
kph
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),
while
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 Table (b) shows the aggregate of urban
zones
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 in thousands. In 1970, Canada had the highest
traffic
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 speed (69kph), followed closely by Russia (63kph) and France (60kph). By 2020 most countries experienced the
traffic
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 pace slowed down, with
UK
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the UK
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 and USA dropping to 47kph and 43kph, respectively. As for urban
zones
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, the USA saw the most substantial increase, rising from 38,000
zones
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 in 1970 to an estimated 128,200 in 2020. Other notable increases include the UK (from 3.4 to 11.8 thousand) and France (from 2.8 to 9.3 thousand). In summary, the data suggests a strong inverse relationship between the number of urban
zones
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 and
traffic
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 speed, with rapid urban expansion likely contributing to slower urban
traffic
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 in most countries.

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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words traffic, zones, kph with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • demographic
  • financial hardship
  • proportion
  • poverty line
  • socio-economic factors
  • employment opportunities
  • wage disparities
  • age groups
  • intersect
  • social policies
  • targeted interventions
  • disproportionately affected
  • comparative analysis
  • statistical representation
  • data visualization
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