IT IS IMPORTANT FOR EVERYONE, INCLUDING YOUNGE PEOPLE, TO SAVE MONEY FOR THEIR FUTURE TO WHAT EXTENT DO YOU AGREE OT OR DISAGREE

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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IT IS IMPORTANT FOR EVERYONE, INCLUDING YOUNGE PEOPLE, TO SAVE MONEY FOR THEIR FUTURE TO WHAT EXTENT DO YOU AGREE OT OR DISAGREE

Fully explain your ideas

Some people say that history has nothing to teach us. Others, however, believe that to understand the present, we must learn from the past. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people think it is a better way to leave their home country to improve their work and living opportunities, while others think staying in their own country is a better choice. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people say that it is better to work for a large company than a small one. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Fewer students are studying science at school and university, favouring more computer-based subjects instead. Is this a positive or negative development? What are the reasons for this? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.