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The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full time or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full time or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart depicts the proportion of males and females studying in British colleges,
as well as
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 three different periods showing whether
studies
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 were pursued full-time or part-time. From an
overall
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 perspective, it is readily apparent that, in Britain,
although
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 a vast majority of students of both genders tend to opt for a part-time
education
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, the number of people choosing a full-time course is increasing over the decades.
To begin
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 with, the proportion of pupils taking a part-time
education
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 was the highest. It can be exemplified by the fact that
this
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 proportion reached a peak in the period 1990/91
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 when nearly 1100
thousand
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 women were part of a part-time course.
Likewise
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, British universities have recorded, in the meantime, 200
thousand
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less
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 men taking a similar
education
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. Part-time
studies
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 are,
therefore
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, the most common pathway taken by students in Britain.
Nevertheless
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, a rise in the amount of learners choosing full-time
studies
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 is noticeable. Indeed,
while
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 there used to be approximately 100
thousand
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 males in a full-time course in the early seventies,
this
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 figure grew gradually to reach twice the original value twenty years later. The number of females in full-time advanced
studies
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 follows a similar pattern since it
was experiencing
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 a sharp increase and passed from approximately 50, in the first period, to 200
thousand
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 in 1990/91.
Hence
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, over time, the amount of individuals in full-time
education
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 is growing.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words studies, education, thousand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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