The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shop that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shop that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.
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The given line chart shows the
number
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of stores closed and opened within one country from 2011 to 2018.
Overall
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, the
number
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of shops that opened starts ahead of closed ones, but during the period it changes and tends to decrease.
While
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shop
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closures
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experienced fluctuations. In detail, the
number
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of opened markets hit a peak
number
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8700
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of 8700
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in 2011,
while
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shop
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closures
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was
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were
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6500 at that time. In 2012,
shop
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openings sharply decreased
around
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to around
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4000 and after that gradually rose above 6000 in 2014 before
dropped
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dropping
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to 4000 in 2015. Between 2015 and 2017 it stabilize around 4000 to 4200. In 2018,
shop
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openings hit a low by decreasing to 3000.
In contrast
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,
shop
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closures
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started at 6500 in 2011 and slightly decreased to 6000
until
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in
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2012.
Then
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the time period between 2012 to 2014 store
closures
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fluctuated
around
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from
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5900 to 7100 before very sharply
decreased
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decreasing
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to about 700 in 2015.
After
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this
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dramatic drop,
closures
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rebounded significantly to about 5,100 in 2016 and remained relatively stable for the next two years, ending at roughly 5,300 in 2018.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, shop, closures with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Graph
  • Number
  • Shops
  • Closed
  • Opened
  • Fluctuation
  • Increase
  • Comparison
  • Trend
  • Period
  • Overall
  • Summarize
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