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The table describes the changevof people who ent for international travel in 1990,1995, 2000 and 2005

The table describes the changevof people who ent for international travel in 1990,1995, 2000 and 2005
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table gives
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information about
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international travel overseas in five different countries from 1990 to 2005. In 1990, a total
448.9
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of 448.9
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million
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people
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 did international travel which surged to 693.7
million
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 in 2005.
In
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 the beginning of the period, 280.2
million
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people
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 almost half of the total population
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, 280.2
million
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people
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 travelled
Europe
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to Europe
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 which
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prospered to 400.2
million
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at the end
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 of the period, which is
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 the highest of all time.
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, America witnessed 60.2
million
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people
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 in 1990 which
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increased by more than two times (135.8) in the span of 15 years. In regards to Africa,
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initially
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 18.2
million
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people
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 travelled overseas and the number increased to 28.7
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in
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 the final year.
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,
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 East experienced 9.8
million
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traveler
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travelers
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 in 1990 which
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increased by almost 2
million
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in
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every 5 years and later marked 15.8
million
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 in 2005.
overall
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, it can be seen that
,
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 Europe had the highest number of travellers all the time
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 East had the lowest number of foreign travellers.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words million, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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