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The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990 1995,2000, 2005

The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990 1995,2000, 2005
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The table describes the crowd who went for
a travel
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travel
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 outside their country in four different years in
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million
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a million
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. In 2005,
total
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a total
the total
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 number of international travellers
were
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was
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 the highest which was 693.7
million
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.
In
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This
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this
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 year, Europe was the most visited (400.2
million
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 people)
while
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the middle
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middle east
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Middle East
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 was the least popular which was visited by 15.8
million
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of
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folks.
Also
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, 448.9
million
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 population only went overseas which was the least in 1990. In
this
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 period of time
also
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, Europe was mostly visited (280.2
million
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of
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apply
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individuals)
whereas
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the middle
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middle east
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Middle East
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 was least visited (9.8
million
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of
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apply
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people).
On the other hand
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,
number
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the number
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 of international travellers visiting America decreased from 2000 to 2005
which
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was 118.3
million
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 visitors to 113.7
million
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 visitors. Meanwhile,
this
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 population increased from 117.4
million
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 to 135.8
million
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 visiting Asia and the
pacific
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Pacific
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 during the same years.
Overall
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, tourists were mostly attracted by Europe and least visited
Middle
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the Middle
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 East in 1990.
This
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 trend continued till 2005.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "describes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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