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Writing Samples
Band 5

You are working for a company.You need to take some time off work and want to ask your manager about this.Write a letter to your manager.In your letter: - explain why you want to take time - give details of the amount of time you need - suggest how your work could be covered while you are away.

Dear manager The main reason why I am writing to you is to inquire about vacation which I need a few days for rest and
also
Linking Words
 my health has many problems. I am one of your loyal workers.
Also
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, I have been working for ten years.I have never asked you for a vacation until now.
In addition
Linking Words
, so far I have been doing my job wholeheartedly.I really love my job and I want to work more.But now I have a little problem with my health.
Therefore
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,I request you
to
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apply
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grant me
have
Verb problem
the time
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 to rest and heal.I want you to give me a month off because I have some problems in my head.
That is
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 why I need to be treated. When I go
vacation
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on vacation
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 I will hand over my work to my friend who used to
effort
Verb problem
work
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 in another company and
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 she can do my
task
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 the main reason why is that she is a highly qualified employee. I hope you will help me,
that is
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,give me leave to rest. Yours sincerely Jennie Kim

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task achievement
Provide a clearer explanation of your health issues without revealing too much personal detail.
coherence and cohesion
Try to enhance the introduction and conclusion for a stronger impact.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single idea to improve clarity.
task achievement
You have shown loyalty and commitment to your job in the letter.
task achievement
Your suggestion of handing over your work is a good approach.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Respectful greeting (e.g., 'Dear [Manager's name],')
  • Time off, absence, leave of absence
  • Personal circumstances, compelling reason
  • Duration, number of days/weeks
  • Cover duties, delegate tasks, work handover
  • Alternative arrangements, contingency plans
  • Preparation, advance work, assistance
  • Gratitude, appreciate, understanding
  • Inconvenience, minimal disruption
  • Request approval, formally request
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