Some people believe that Art gives our lives meaning and purpose. Others believe that it is merely a distraction from real life. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Task Achievement
The introduction could be clearer by defining what art is and mentioning its significance more explicitly. Additionally, your opinion should be stated more clearly in the introduction.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure topic sentences clearly indicate what each paragraph will discuss. This will improve the logical structure of your essay. Use appropriate linking words to connect ideas within and between paragraphs.
Task Achievement
Provide more specific examples to support your points. For instance, mentioning specific artworks or artists can make your arguments more compelling and relevant.
Task Achievement
Good attempt to discuss both sides of the argument, showing that you understand the topic.
Task Achievement
You expressed your personal opinion clearly at the end, which is important in this type of essay.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • aesthetic
  • cathartic
  • cultural tapestry
  • expressionism
  • fleeting
  • introspection
  • monetary value
  • nostalgia
  • profound impact
  • socioeconomic
  • subjective perspective
  • visceral response
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