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Band 4.5

You have recently moved to a new city. Write a letter to your friend and tell them: Why you moved to the new city Describe your new place Invite them to visit you

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Hey Harjit, How's going,
its
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it's
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 been
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while
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a while
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we
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since we
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 had a chat.I writing
this
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 letter to tell you that I have moved
Montreal
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from Montreal
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 to
Oshawa
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 permanently.
Since
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For
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 the
last
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 10 years I
was
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have been
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 living
at
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in
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montreal
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Montreal
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,
moving
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and moving
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 into
new
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a new
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 city I
find
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found
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quite emotionally difficult as I have
alot
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a lot
 of memories there.
Actually
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 I have
promoted
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been promoted
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 from
assistance
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 manager to general manager and my company's
headquater
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headquarters
headquarter
is in
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oshawa
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Oshawa
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 so
this
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 was the reason for moving.
Although
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oshawa
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Oshawa
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 is a small city , it has quite
fasninating
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fascinating
 places
such
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 as small beaches and some big forest trails.
Beside
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this
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, there is
also
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 a big shopping
center
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centre
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 called
Oshawa
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 City Center, which contains many luxury brands
such
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 as Jordan, Nike and Addidas. I was thinking
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it's
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 been
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while
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a while
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we
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since we
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 had a great time together , so visit me on the next long weekend .Those
late night
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late-night
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 conversations I have been missing
from
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for
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 a long time ,
also
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 we will
also
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going
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go
be going
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 to visit
shopping
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the shopping
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center
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centre
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 as I am looking to buy new clothes and shoes so be
prepare
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prepared
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 for that too. With love Amar

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coherence
Consider organizing your paragraphs more clearly by ensuring each one has a single main idea. This will improve the overall coherence of your letter.
task achievement
You've done well to include personal feelings about the move, which adds depth to your letter. This makes it relatable and engaging.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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