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For the past year, you have been a member of a local club. Now you want to discontinue your membership. Write a letter to the club secretary. In your letter ● state what type of membership you have and how you have paid for this ● give details of how you have benefited from the club ● explain why you want to leave

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Dear Mr. John, I am writing
this
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 letter to discontinue my membership
from
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 your club,
due to
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 unavoidable reasons.
To begin
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 with, I feel honoured to be part of your esteemed club, which I was fortunate enough to join two years ago
,
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 when I
had
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moved to
this
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 city. I applied for membership immediately upon arrival, and it was a privilege to get the platinum membership by paying through a credit card. As a platinum member, I used to enjoy various services
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 as
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 swimming and golfing, mostly on weekends.
Moreover
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, I was able to connect with other community members, fostering a strong relationship and bond with them.
However
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, my
circumtances
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circumstances
 have changed now as I am moving out to another city,
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 my work
committments
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commitments
.
As a result
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, I want to cancel my subscription
from
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 immediate effect.
However
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, I will be happy to pay any dues pending on me. Thanks for taking the time to read
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, and I look forward to your acknowledgement
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 my cancellation request. Yours sincerely, Sumit Dua

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task achievement
Consider providing a bit more detail on how you specifically benefited from the club, which can enhance your overall request for cancellation.
coherence and cohesion
Review the structure of your paragraphs to ensure they clearly separate distinct ideas; this may enhance clarity.
coherence and cohesion
Double-check for minor spelling errors (e.g., 'circumtances' should be 'circumstances', and 'committments' should be 'commitments') as these can affect the impression of your writing.
tone
Your letter maintains a respectful and polite tone throughout, which is impressive.
task achievement
You clearly state your membership type and the reasons for discontinuation, which is very important in this type of letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • polite greeting
  • membership cancellation
  • benefited
  • annual/monthly/family/individual membership
  • credit card/direct debit/cash payment
  • positive experiences
  • social interactions
  • fitness improvements
  • personal reasons
  • financial constraints
  • relocation
  • change in interests
  • gratitude
  • procedure
  • notice period
  • courteous explanation
  • future rejoining
  • sign-off
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