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You are attending a course at an evening school. Write a letter to the director of the school with a complaint about the course. In your letter, you should: – Describe the course you are taking. – Explain what you don’t like about the course. – Give your opinion about what should be done about it.

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Dear sir, I am writing
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 letter to inform you that, I am not satisfied with the way teaching by Gurpreet Kaur. The course
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 the syllabus. My name is Manpreet Singh, I am in 10th grade and taking the English course at 6:00pm. I have a keen interest in the English subject and want to pursue my next study abroad. Our teacher
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is always late
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 by 30 minutes
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,
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 has been happening
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 week, I
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 filled my exam, which is coming in the next 2 weeks.
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, most of the time she is on the phone and
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chatting.
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, sometimes her behaviour is
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 rude to students, which leads to a toxic environment during
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. We are lagging in grammar and vocabulary. My request is that please ask the teacher in your way
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 so that she can come to
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 on time and provide the solutions to students with decent behaviour. So, that the students can learn everything about the course
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 the curriculum. I hope to hear from you a positive response, related to the problem we face during
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. Yours faithfully, Manpreet Singh

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greeting and closing
Make sure the opening includes a proper greeting with the director's title if known, and ensure the closing is formal. A more polished salutation would improve your letter's formality.
logical structure
Try breaking down your complaints into separate paragraphs for clarity. Each paragraph should focus on one main point, which can enhance the overall structure of your letter.
single idea per paragraph
Ensure that your sentences are free of grammatical errors and complete thoughts. This will help convey your message more clearly and improve the overall quality of your writing.
task achievement
You clearly expressed your dissatisfaction with the course, which is essential for a complaint letter.
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Your passion for the English subject and desire to study abroad add a personal touch to your letter, making it more relatable.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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