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The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors who came to the UK for different purposes between 1989 and 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors who came to the UK for different purposes between 1989 and 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the figure of tourists who visited the
UK
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 for
business
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, holiday, meeting friends and relatives between 1989 and 2009.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the maximum sum of
people
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 visited the
UK
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 to spend their vacation.
While
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 the
number
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 of
people
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 who came to the
UK
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 for
business
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 and meeting their
families
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 rose, and who came for holidays fluctuated. In 1989, around 6.5
million
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 international visitors came to the
UK
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 for their holidays,
whereas
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 5
million
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 and 3.5
million
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people
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 came for their
business
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 and to meet their friends and
families
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. From 1989 to 2004, the
number
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 of foreigners who came for the purpose of their
business
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 and for meeting their friends and
families
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 increased and reached 7 and 6
million
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 respectively.
However
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, the
number
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 of
people
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 who visited the
UK
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 for their holidays increased and reached 9
million
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 in 1994, but after that, the
number
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 fell to 6.5
million
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 in 2003.
Furthermore
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, after 2004, the total of holiday visitors rose again and peaked at 9
million
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 by the end of time. The figure of international visitors for
business
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 and meeting their
families
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 increased to 8 and 7
million
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 in 2008, which declined to 7 and 6
million
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 in 2009.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, business, people, number, families, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overseas visitors
  • trend
  • fluctuations
  • statistics
  • year-on-year comparison
  • peak periods
  • holidaymakers
  • business trips
  • educational tourism
  • significant increase/decrease
  • data interpretation
  • exponential growth
  • steady decline
  • seasonal variation
  • cultural events
  • tourist influx
  • graph analysis
  • quantitative change
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