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The bar chart below shows about the average children born per woman in 5 countries in 1970 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows about the average children born per woman in 5 countries in 1970 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph compares the
birth
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 rates in
India
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,
Thailand
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,
Mexico
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,
Spain
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 and
Somalia
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 in 1970 and 2000.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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India
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 and
Thailand
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 had the highest and
Spain
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 had the lowest
birth
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rate
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 in the first year,
whereas
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Somalia
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 had the highest
rate
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 of
birth
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 in the later year. The
birth
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rate
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 in
Mexico
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 remained steady during both years. In 1970,
India
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 had a
birth
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rate
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 of 5.2, followed by
Thailand
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 at 4.8 per
women
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. There is no difference was noticed in the
rate
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 of
birth
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 in
Mexico
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 and
Somalia
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 accounted 3 children per woman.
Spain
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 had the lowest
birth
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rate
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 of 2.8 per woman in 1970.
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, after 3 decades, the
birth
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rate
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 in
India
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 fell to 3. There is a difference of 0.4 was noticed in the
birth
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rate
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 in
Thailand
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 and
Spain
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 at 1.8 per and 1.4
accordingly
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. The
birth
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rate
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 in
Somalia
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 was higher than
Mexico
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 reported 3.5 and 3 per woman respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words birth, india, thailand, mexico, spain, somalia, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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