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The Pie chart below show the main reasons why agricultural land becomes Iess productivitive. The table shows how these causes affected regions of the world during the 1990s.

The Pie chart below show the main reasons why agricultural land becomes Iess productivitive. The table shows how these causes affected regions of the world during the 1990s.
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 the reasons behind the degradation of lands.
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 provides a survey of continents that were affected by these problems in 1990. It is evident that there are three major reasons behind
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 problem.
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, slightly more than one-third of the total unusable
land
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 is degraded because of over-grazing.
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, 30% of the areas are not usable because of deforestation.
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 is over-cultivation,
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 contributes 28% to the cause. In 1990, deforestation and over-cultivation were the major reasons for Europe's 23%
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land
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which
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became abandoned.
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, in
ocenia
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 13%
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land
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 was degraded and the primary reason was over-grazing.
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, over-cultivation was
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 reason for North
Americas'
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 5%
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land
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uncapable
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incapable
for
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 agriculture.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words land with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • agricultural productivity
  • soil degradation
  • climate change
  • urbanization
  • food security
  • crop yield
  • sustainable practices
  • land management
  • deforestation
  • irrigation
  • fertility
  • environmental impact
  • economic implications
  • resource management
  • conservation strategies
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